How I got into NYUAD/NYUAD common app college essay/대학 자소서 상상력풀가동 필요/ 합격률 2% 뉴욕대 아부다비 자소서 공유

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※이 에세이는 2019년 Early Decision I 입시에 사용되었고 최종 합격한 에세이입니다. 불법으로 퍼가지 말아 주세요.

 

Hello! Today I will be sharing my common app essay that got me into NYUAD in hopes that this could be of some help to students applying this year. My following posts after this will be about explaining the essay writing strategies that I have used in my common app and the NYU supplement essay. Such posts will be uploaded in Korean and English so please subscribes to this blog or come back to it after bookmarking it.

 

※This essay was used in the 2019 Early Decision I application which resulted in the final acceptance to NYU Abu Dhabi. Please do not upload or share this content with out a reference to this link. You are more than welcome to share this link via any types of social media ;-)

 

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Discuss an accomplishment, event, or realization that sparked a period of personal growth and a new understanding of yourself or others.

 

 

My Own Golden Rule

 

The intense sunlight of summer morning shined upon my bottle and the baby water droplets surrounding it. I always left a bottle of deep-frozen mango juice on the kitchen table so that it would melt into a slush by the time I left for school. Whenever I shared my frosty juice with my friends, their mouths were filled with juice?-and smiles. As the demand for the drink grew in the classroom, I even started to use an extra-large bottle. Since selflessness and altruism were morals taught in school, the 11-year-old child was convinced to live by the golden rule: treat others as you want to be treated.

 

That day, I actually forgot to bring the mango slush to school. Thankfully, one of my friends, Ji Hae, had brought apple juice. When she took out the bottle of juice everyone lined up to get a sip, myself included. Despite all the peers surrounding her, I assumed she would reach out to me first-since I always shared my juice with her. After a few classmates got a taste, I went up and asked, "Can I have some too?"

 

"No, people drank so much! The rest is mine!" she snapped.

 

This is how I realized that the golden rule did not apply both ways in real life. I lent people items all the time, but most classmates were reluctant to do the same for me. The apple juice was just another one of those items.

 

When my mom came home, I asked, "Why aren't people nice to me even though I'm nice to them?"

 

She replied, "That's because you're nice to everyone. It gives them no incentive to be nice to you."

 

Incentive. It was one of those big words that I heard adults use in mid-conversation, but couldn't grasp the meaning of.

 

"What's an incentive?" I asked.

 

"It's what motivates people to do things. Think of it like a deal. If you want someone to do something, you need to give them 'motivation', like money".

 

The next day I went to school, curious to see if Mom's 'motivation theory' was true. Since Ji Hae had brought her apple juice again, I went over to her and asked once again if she would share.

 

When she rejected, I added, "What if I paid you 500 won (around 50 cents)?"

 

She seemed a bit confused then quickly refused. I asked, "why?"

 

She simply said, "I don't need 500 won"

 

I went back to my seat wondering why my 'incentive' was unable to motivate Ji Hae. As I pondered, Ji Hae took out her pink mechanical pencil with white polka dots and started to click the top for more lead, however, the lead had ran out! I immediately went up to her with a piece of pencil lead and asked "Can I have some apple juice, now?" This time-though a bit reluctantly-Ji Hae said yes.

 

This was my first successful deal.

 

From that day on, I have provided people with 'incentives' in exchange for what I wanted. With every deal, I would always weigh my gains with the risk factors, opportunity costs, and any after-effects. I may seem selfish for doing so, but my relationships with friends improved. People are happy to share things with me because they understand the favorable trade-off for them.

 

As I got older, I learned that my actions develop social connections for a win-win trade. In every decision, I think about how my actions influence other people because it provides me with some guidance to which doors I should knock on in times of need.

 

The naïve young girl failed to recognize that each individual possesses different values over the same entity. However, she later realized that the golden rule is not to treat others as you want to be treated, but to treat others how they want to be treated.

 

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'Why NYU?' Essay is also shared on this blog!